whats that very first image? because if its supposed to be the barrel of a gun, which is kinda the impression i get, if it is then I feel it needs just a little more clarity. because in my opinion (just to use as you see fit) if i didnt already know that it was about him dying it would be kind of difficult for me to connect it to the narrative at the end. so i feel that i wouldnt get that it is all supposed to be happening in that short period of his death. but maybe you want that so they will have to watch it through again. knowing what it was, i thought it rocked. i enjoyed the affect of the brain flashing though different memories, and sensory experience was.
Thank you for looking over for it. The beginning image is actually the inside of an electric pencil sharpener, but it's kind of standing in for a gun in the mind of the dying soldier.
This time around I didn't want to give everything away up front. I wanted the experience to be somewhat more chaotic, while giving information away a bit more miserly.
i almost think this is too abstract. You should experiment with a mixture of the footage that you showed in class, with these abstract images. (more shots of the soldier dying) I think this piece is going in a good direction though. The visuals are more appropriate in this version but it needs to be tinkered with. Also this project reminds me of the movie Jacobs Ladder. If you haven't seen it, i suggest checking it out.
whats that very first image? because if its supposed to be the barrel of a gun, which is kinda the impression i get, if it is then I feel it needs just a little more clarity. because in my opinion (just to use as you see fit) if i didnt already know that it was about him dying it would be kind of difficult for me to connect it to the narrative at the end. so i feel that i wouldnt get that it is all supposed to be happening in that short period of his death. but maybe you want that so they will have to watch it through again. knowing what it was, i thought it rocked. i enjoyed the affect of the brain flashing though different memories, and sensory experience was.
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ReplyDeleteThank you for looking over for it. The beginning image is actually the inside of an electric pencil sharpener, but it's kind of standing in for a gun in the mind of the dying soldier.
ReplyDeleteThis time around I didn't want to give everything away up front. I wanted the experience to be somewhat more chaotic, while giving information away a bit more miserly.
i almost think this is too abstract. You should experiment with a mixture of the footage that you showed in class, with these abstract images. (more shots of the soldier dying) I think this piece is going in a good direction though. The visuals are more appropriate in this version but it needs to be tinkered with.
ReplyDeleteAlso this project reminds me of the movie Jacobs Ladder. If you haven't seen it, i suggest checking it out.